“Uh-huh, Uh-huh, Yo, Yo…”

January Slide Show #18

Photo taken, developed, and printed by El Jefe (March 2010)

The second El Jefe showed me this work of art he made, I immediately wanted to write something for my Chunk #2. A picture really does say a thousand words.  I think poetry can do the same.  The challenge is writing a piece that says a thousand words, without actually writing one thousand words, right?  I haven’t been brave enough to share some of my work on this here blog. So, I’m going to break those shackles of self-doubt and just share already. I think, of those proverbial one thousand words, dare I say I might have caught two hundred and fifty of them in my poem?  In any case…….love this girl!

Star-like

Look up.
Breathe your soul into those heavenly torches,
for they blink and wink at you.

Only you.

The Fairy,
The Queen,
The Sparkly Butterfly,
The center of their shimmering swarm.

Twirl.
You giggle a waltz in
a-rhythmic turns and steps.

Gild your days,
with ornate crowns and
Satiny play dresses too big ’round the shoulders.

Adjusting your sleeve,
jeans peering out the bottom,
you call to me
with the cadence of a twinkle.

~Laura Archibald
Summer 2010
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This slide show is in honor of Kodachrome’s 75 years on this earth. Click here.

Ahem, if you have some serious feedback on my writing, please feel free to share. I can take it. I can.

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6 responses

  1. Wendy

    Absolutely lovely. The photo, the poem, and the girl.

    January 27, 2011 at 12:42 pm

  2. Lisa

    Loved it. Perfectly describes these girls of ours. And, NOW, you need to go and read my post from today…as it goes quite well with your own!

    January 27, 2011 at 3:33 pm

  3. Why did he leave out the colored roses and beret?

    January 27, 2011 at 6:41 pm

  4. Beautiful poem. That’s the one thing that kids lose in their adolescence, the confidence you feel with yourself and the planet when you are sweet and young.

    January 28, 2011 at 8:50 am

  5. I rarely take the time to comment because well it takes time and I rarely have any sparing; however, I have to tell you how much I have loved your January slideshow and I’m so sad it is ending:( Thanks for sharing your poetry. It is beautiful!

    January 30, 2011 at 9:43 am

  6. “heavenly torches” — that part, while it reads well, has me a little confused, thoughtful.

    I’d suggest leaving out these words:
    ornate, twinkle (too telly/melodramatic). Just a thought, though. 🙂

    Go with the jeans peeking out of the bottom, a great touch!!

    February 10, 2011 at 6:49 pm

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